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  • rakeemnelson

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    March 7, 2021 at 6:51 am
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    I’m super excited to see how this evolved! I’m only thrown off by page 5 due to it being the only page not dedicated to a comic-era style. Other than that, my only suggestion is that the style down have to be so linear. You can go Golden to Manga, back to Silver then to Image, but this isn’t a big deal and the way you have it now is fine.

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    March 7, 2021 at 6:41 am
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    Super excited that you went with this one! You do a wonderful job of making this feel eerie from the plotlines alone, but I’m a little thrown off by how the Dad searching for his son leads to him checking out on time. Is he spending the entire night searching for his son and gets back too late? Or does his late-night search keep him from where he’s supposed to be?

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    February 21, 2021 at 3:07 am
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    This idea has all the makings of a great love letter to the comics medium. But focusing on jumps you can really show how the medium has evolved via the different pages/panels and I really hope that’s what you plan on doing with this project.

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    February 21, 2021 at 2:51 am
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    I really like the second one! I don’t know if this is due to the way you explain it via summary, but the second story really shines more than the first. I think to focus on when you move over to the scripting phase is the sense of rhythm. Since the comic is 8-pages and the story is taking place over the course of 12 floors/room, find the floors to dedicated a bulk of your time vs. the floors that can be skipped over may be tricky. I have faith tho!

  • rakeemnelson

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    February 18, 2021 at 7:20 am
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    Hey everyone! Rakeem Nelson is the name. I’m a writer who took part in the first anthology project, but I had to hang up the towel because I couldn’t find a partner in time. I have a short story published in Ahoy Comics’ Ash and Thron issue #2 and I’m hoping to make more comic work.

    I’m bringing story ideas to the table and I can help with some of the lettering as well! Super excited to see what everyone else is going to bring to the anthology this year!

  • rakeemnelson

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    February 18, 2021 at 7:15 am
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    Hi, I am Rakeem Nelson. I am a writer with some lettering experience. I’m looking to work with artists, inkers, colorists, and editors alike! I like all stories but really enjoy horror and sci-fi. My goal is to create more work for the next 3 years to build my portfolio so I can freelance in the comic world.

  • rakeemnelson

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    April 28, 2020 at 6:49 am
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    @Joel Barker I love the comedy woven towards the end of your script, but I’m not sold on Stephen’s turn to lunacy just yet. Him going from looking at his phone seeing fake news to attacking Mark feels sharp. I feel like you can have Stephan become a little stranger earlier.

    @Double Barrel Theatre You do a wonderful job of giving your main character an out for the case Mainly because simple solutions always trip up complicated people. There’s also a lot of information that you include in your plot summary, like the kind of establishment they’re at, that kind of weights down the story. Will you be giving this background information through caption narrations with an unnamed narrator or will Gary be the narrator for this story?

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    April 18, 2020 at 2:31 am
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    @Sathem, I look at the plot summary and I have a better understanding of your story so disregard my previous comments. My only comment is that you really need to hammer home a reason why this vampire feels a connection with the main character. This way her being spared doesn’t feel cheap.

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    @Sathem, I love the idea of the massacre at the end, but can you clarify if this is the initial crew. If so, I hope you provide some foreshadowing if it was the Grunts or the Boffers who started the conflict. Maybe the man’s monologue saves her from the same fate.

    @AndresBriano, your story is hilarious. My only comment is to watch out for overstuffing a page with the backstory and possibly have the artist throw in some oversize ordinary objects in the background to foreshadow the ending but not give it away.

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    April 16, 2020 at 9:07 pm
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    plot: In this noir-like tale, a young detective is given the case of her elementary school career when a client goes to her with proof of the lunchtime bandit

    Page 1: Susie wakes up and finds herself tied to a chair
    Page 2: Flashback, Susie is cleaning her office
    Page 3: Vanessa and Henry walk into Susie’s office
    Page 4: Susie is investigating serval leads
    Page 5: Present, Henry walks out of the shadows
    Page 6: Henry explains his plan
    Page 7: Teacher discovers the kids in the darkroom
    last page: upon returning to her office, Susie finds that it’s raided. a small hair bow is on the floor.

  • rakeemnelson

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    April 13, 2020 at 2:46 am
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    TITLE: Untitled as of now
    Written by Rakeem Nelson
    Story Concept: In this noir-like tale, a young detective is given the case of her elementary school career when a client goes to her with proof of the lunchtime bandit. The young PI is happy to prove to the others that she’s the best at what she does. But with crooked hall monitors, lazy teachers, and ears that seem to be everywhere, this PI might have bitten off more than she could chew.

    Springboard:
    Moments away from solving the case, Susie Sureway wakes up tied to a chair in an abandoned classroom. A voice from the shadows tells her not to scream as everyone else is out at recess.

    Earlier that day Susie was in her janitor closet office organizing her trading cards. Suddenly in walks Vanessa Basial and Henry Ink, two kids from a neighboring class. Susie wants to kick them out but sits them down for a round of juice boxes when they say they have a tip on the lunchtime bandit.

    Armed with her clue, Susie begins to chase after the case. But her new lead lands her in a trap.

    Back in the present, out walks Henry out of the shadows revealing that the clue was fake, and it was all a set up so he could join the hall monitors. Little does Henry know; his teacher was in the room the whole time.

    Returning to her office, Susie finds it broken into with one of her prized trading cards stolen. And the only clue is a bow from Vanessa.

  • rakeemnelson

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    April 7, 2020 at 6:33 am
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    Sadly, I missed the hangout call, but I’m going to follow Zammap’s Lead.

    While weel-verse in traditional superhero comics, lately I’ve shifted my focus to telling stories featuring younger characters. My concepts are still in an early phase, but I’m planning to expand on them with the directions giving

    1) Armed with a “magic” camera, two kids venture out into the forest behind their house to find otherworldly animals. Even though their camera can’t find anything out of the ordinary, maybe there’s more to this forest than meets the eye.

    2) In this noir-like tale, a young detective is given the case of her elementary school career when a client goes to her with proof of the lunchtime bandit. The young PI is happy to prove to the others that she’s the best at what she does. But with crooked hall monitors, lazy teachers, and ears that seem to be everywhere, this PI might have bitten off more than she could chew.

    Still working on the details of both concepts, but I’m looking forward to feedback!

  • rakeemnelson

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    April 7, 2020 at 5:54 am
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    I saw it on the comic’s school twitter account

  • rakeemnelson

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    April 6, 2020 at 8:12 am
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    Hey guys! very excited to see so many people writing in this forum. I’m a writer who loves slice of life, sci-fi, and fantasy. I’m looking for a full team, but would love to hear the types of stories you guys are passionate about working on.

  • rakeemnelson

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    Hi guys! Super excited to see this being developed and I would love to join. I can’t wait to hear about future updates!

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