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  • jarrod-elvin

    Member
    February 22, 2021 at 6:32 pm

    I thought it would be cool to have a story that loops; ends back where it began and repeats, that includes Cause-and-Effect paradoxes, like they have to do one thing to cause another, which causes the need for them to do the first thing.
    (I wanted it to be simple, but this is proving to be quite the challenge to write, while still trying to keep the structure intact for a legitimate and fulfilling single read-through.)

    Anyways, the basic stripped-down premise is:
    The Meatbucket MegaBabes are fleeing from a giant space-monster and after they defeat it with the use of a strange artifact, they decide to lay low at a mysterious space-hotel called the Time Inn (The Inn’s slogan is ‘Stay a night, for the rest of your life!’) to rest and gather their thoughts because their memory is playing tricks on them.
    The Inn’s creepy Concierge and Bellboy thank the ladies for retrieving their lost artifact, and reward them with a free stay in the hotel.
    The Meatbucket MegaBabes get lost in the maze of the hotel, while the Concierge uses the artifact to resurrect an ancient space-monster.
    With failing memory, amidst the many lost souls trapped in the hotel, on the run from the monster lurking in the halls and growing in size, the Meatbucket MegaBabes discover a strange artifact that holds promise for them to defeat the monster and escape the hotel…

    None of this is set in stone just yet. Many elements are subject to change and I’m still working on the bugs and potential plot-holes before I get into the finer details, but I thought it would be cool to have a story that loops; ends back where it began and repeats, that includes Cause-and-Effect paradoxes, like they have to do one thing to cause another, which causes the need for them to do the first thing.
    (I wanted it to be simple, but this is proving to be quite the challenge to write, while still trying to keep the structure intact for a legitimate and fulfilling single read-through.) 😉

  • redheadeded

    Moderator
    February 22, 2021 at 11:26 pm

    @jarrod-elvin This is awesome!

    I love the idea that the comic itself is in a time loop, have you thought that the monster that they defeat at the begining is the monster the the Concierge releases? and it escapes the hotel which (after they defeat it again) is why the have to come back to the hotel in the first place? third place, tenth place? I’m not sure if you’d want them to fix the loop, but good luck in writting it, this is gonna be great!!!

    Thanks,

    D Alley, the Redheadeded

  • jarrod-elvin

    Member
    February 23, 2021 at 8:06 am

    Thanks D!

    Oh yes, the monster they defeat at the start is definitely the one the Concierge unleashes in the middle. Although I’d like that to be not so obvious at first, so maybe it will start small and grow in size or transform leading up to the end.

    And yes, the Meatbucket MegaBabes will use the artifact to escape the hotel maze – in a climactic (and hopefully satisfying) ending – but the monster comes out with them and they all wind up in the same scenario as at the start. I’m thinking of having the last dialogue balloon of the comic saying “Phew! I think we lost it” as they are exiting the hotel, and the first dialogue balloons of the comic, when they are in open space, will say “What?” – “I said, I think we lost it” – “Oh no we didn’t!!” for example, when the monster appears (again, for the first time).

    I don’t really want them to break the loop, however on subsequent readings I’d like the readers to be able to see smaller details that may not have made sense at first, and how the loop might be broken if the characters were to do a specific thing differently. Like it’s teetering on the edge of being broken if only ____.

    (Sorry – again – if there are multiples of this reply. It seems to disappear when I edit it, so I will stop doing that)

  • evolver

    Member
    February 23, 2021 at 9:45 am

    I can really see the paradox thing working very well for these characters and your setting. very cool.

    • jarrod-elvin

      Member
      March 2, 2021 at 9:55 am

      Thanks Evolver! Hopefully I can get it working seamlessly without plot holes or any issues like that

  • redheadeded

    Moderator
    February 23, 2021 at 9:27 pm

    Cool cool. It sounds great. I can’t wait to see the MegaBabes back in action!

    Thanks Jarrod!

    D Alley, the Redheadeded

    • jarrod-elvin

      Member
      March 2, 2021 at 9:56 am

      Thanks D!

      I can’t wait either!

  • MisterAnderSiN

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    March 2, 2021 at 9:13 am

    When you get a second could you please fill out the form at the bottom of this page so we have all your info on file https://www.comicbookschool.com/creative-prompt-8-pg-challenge-2/

    • jarrod-elvin

      Member
      March 2, 2021 at 9:53 am

      Done. Sorry I didn’t do it earlier, I thought it was only for new enrolments for this year. Let me know if it is all satisfactory.

      • MisterAnderSiN

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        March 2, 2021 at 10:01 am

        Thank you for filling out the form I have sent you an email and a way to contact me if needed directly.

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