MemberFebruary 19, 2021 at 1:33 am20 Forum Points
Set in the same world as “Camriddeon and the Leighman Lurkers.” Working with @evan-scale
Each page is a different point in time for Camriddeon, and each time is different. The creature, a little thing unstuck from time, watches with curiosity. Camriddeon is struggling with the very nature of his own life. He speaks with others who are hoping for wisdom, which he hopes to impart himself while trying to wrestle with his own demons.
We take each page like a story unto itself, with the focus being on the other characters, and their relation to the creature, not Camriddeon.
Geza – Speak with Geza about time. The very nature and understanding
Geza is trying to catch the little beast. Camriddeon chides him, and the young soon-to-be-diplomat. They talk about going to new worlds, and finding new understanding
Sevrine and Camriddeon are fighting. To be more accurate, Sevrine is fighting, trying to get him to care about something, anything. She says he cares more about that thing than their marriage.
Elena watches the creature, fascinated. Camriddeon watches her. Elena asks what love is supposed to be like. Camriddeon says that it is something that we can’t quite live without. That the days aren’t as important, the nights far too long.
The creature dances as the Bard plays on. Camriddeon snaps, angry. The Bard wants to tell a tale, while Camriddeon says that company is overrated. Life is overrated.
The Creature hides in fear. The Wild Bear is on a glorious rampage. He speaks with Camriddeon about life on the road, how it lets him see life anew. This is what life is supposed to be. Good company, and a little excitement. He draws his axe and starts to swing at the beast.
Alais slams Camriddeon down on the table, laughing. The creature screams and hides. Alias runs over, and tries to soothe him, suddenly nervous. Camriddeon speaks with her about the nature of fear. How it is so easy to lose trust. She is cautious, and wonders what Camriddeon could be thinking, sending her to be making overtures to the elves. Camriddeon says that fear is natural, but we cannot let it consume us all.
Mara feeds the creature. She met with Camriddeon for the first time in a while. Camriddeon is trying to understand what Mara’s mother could be thinking. But perhaps, he might be helpful to Mara, who is already starting to sparkle in her own right.
The little beast stalks through the abandoned inn, alone. Camriddeon catches him, and looks on. He is able to see what the creature sees, and wonders what truth is. And if it is at all possible to stop it.
Alone by himself, trying to understand the world. He captures the creature for a second, and is able to see how the creature sees.
Camriddeon speaks with the Wild Bear about the time period. War, death, and whether it is right to inflict one’s values on another
Geza and Camriddeon speak on the nature of diplomacy
Alais and beasts of the field, involving themselves in a brawl.
Elena and loving other people
The last fight with Sevrine
The Bard and finding out who writes the right tale.
Mara, and regret
ModeratorFebruary 21, 2021 at 3:10 am
This looks very interesting and very well thought-through, but unfortunately, reading it as a person who doesn’t have the whole story, it is hard to follow. Without context, we (currently the community, and later on the reader) don’t know who these people are? There are mentions of people and creatures but from this description it’s hard to tell who is who, and how they are related to Camriddion or the point of view charater/creature? I am also curious are you visually going to differeciate these periods of time in Camriddeons life? Is there something to say how ‘the creature’ sees these and if they are not chrological what is the purpose of seeing them in a different order?
It looks like this has a lot of thought behind it, but I’d be interested at this point to better undertand what that thought is, as it seems deep, but again, I (as the viewer/read) don’t know what you story you are trying to tell from what you have written here?
That’s my 2 cents anyway, good luck with this story, I’d love to better understand what happens.
D Alley, the Redheadeded
ModeratorMarch 2, 2021 at 9:17 am
When you get a second could you please fill out the form at the bottom of this page so we have all your info on file https://www.comicbookschool.com/creative-prompt-8-pg-challenge-2/
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