• Here’s my draft -Goat Feet-

  • Christoff_RDGZ

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    June 7, 2021 at 9:48 pm
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    Hello there!

    I hope this count as Flash Fiction, hahaha. I’m not used to write prose but It was fun.

    Cheers,

    -Christoff

  • thesurrealari

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    June 15, 2021 at 7:00 pm
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    I think the legend is interesting, but there are a lot of levels of framing in the story, too many for a flash fiction. Piece. I would start in the bar, fill in the details about the newspaper in between the dialogue. This would allow you to zoom in on some scene when you tell the story of the nun and the goat feet, which I think would benefit the story greatly.

    It’s flash fiction, you want to get in there quicker and focus in on the key part.

    Also, please post your next draft In the “Rough Draft” forum, as that’s where the members of our community will be looking for drafts to give feedback.

    • Christoff_RDGZ

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      June 25, 2021 at 8:41 pm
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      Howdy!

      Sorry for the late response.

      Thank you very much for your feedback, I’ll try out a new draft taking into consideration your suggestion. Next time I hope I’ll post it in he right place.

      Cheers!

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