• Assassins in the Dark

  • krisburgos

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    March 6, 2021 at 9:34 am
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    The story takes place in the afternoon at a tavern in the outskirts of modern-day Jerusalem, where an archaeologist is waiting for his ride to a desert dig site and is looking over some documents at the bar. Unbeknownst to him, he’s about to have a conversation with two assassins that will determine how they kill him, in order to stop him from reaching the dig.

    The Characters:

    Dr David Michaels (54, male, from Boston, MA): World Renowned Archaeologist and fencer extraordinaire, he has issues with organized religion (specifically how the Catholic Church forces doctrine onto believers as a way of “salvation” and doesn’t allow for question or doubt). He hides the fact that he is dying of cancer.

    Valentín Ramόn (53, male, from Casablanca, Morocco): one of the last remaining descendants of the Executors, he is a devout follower of the Order and is willing to do whatever is necessary to stop anyone from reaching the ruins. After years of watching his Order’s already-shallow numbers dwindle, he realizes that to stop the truth of the ruins from getting out, he may have to change how they work and ask for outside help.

    Isabel Ramón (23, male, from Rome, Italy): daughter of Valentín, she is extremely headstrong and as devout a follower of the Executors as her father. She is physically gifted and being an assassin and soldier truly comes as second nature. Confident in her abilities and even considered “extremist” in nature, she is as willing to defy the Church as she is to start a bar fight.

    Page 1:

    Year 1096: Crusaders fight berserker villagers & soldiers

    Page 2:

    Year 1272: Bodies are being burned around an entire desert battlefield, men carry bodies into a mass tomb

    Page 3:

    Dr Michaels sits at a tavern bar reading classified Church documents

    Page 4:

    Assassins sit at a table in shadow, watching man, debate how to kill him

    Page 5:

    Assassins approach man, start conversation at bar

    Page 6:

    They discuss man’s work & his distaste for being “summoned” by Church

    Page 7:

    Valentin sees his cancer pills & they discuss a person’s time on earth, Valentin waves off Isabel from kill attempt, thinks they can use him as an inside man

    Page 8:

    Assassins take man to car to drive him to dig, body of actual driver in dump behind car

  • redheadeded

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    March 10, 2021 at 2:07 am
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    Hey @krisburgos ,

    This is great, since i got a bit of the backstory, I’m interested in to how this bit will cover the prompt, is the bar in the Time Inn? or is it only a shadowed reference to other things?

    Looking forward to hearing how the dialog goes between the father and daughter assassins.

    Thanks for Posting!

    D Alley, the Redheadeded

  • krisburgos

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    March 11, 2021 at 8:44 pm
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    Hey @redheadeded

    I’m still working on how I’m going to fully write the internal dialogue, but the story is going to be told from the POV of the father assassin. He’s going to make subtle internal comments about how time and again, over the past few centuries, every person who gets close to the discovery of truth in the desert, they are drawn to this exact tavern/inn, to meet their demise.

  • redheadeded

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    March 14, 2021 at 11:55 pm
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    Very cool, looking forward to your plot revisions. 😉

    D Alley, the Redheadeded

  • jojabarker

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    March 29, 2021 at 11:14 am
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    Don’t know why, but feeling a DA VINCI CODE vibe 😏

    I like that this is going to be from the “antagonist’s” point-of-view!

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