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  • philipspace

    April 30, 2020 at 8:02 am
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    My revised plot.

    The Anachronists (working title):
    Trapped in Time
    A girl from the 25th century (Xandra) and her 19th century cowboy companion (Mattias) have accidentally travelled back in time to the Middle Ages. Chased by guardsmen, they are captured by an evil knight (Edmond the Black), who is accompanied by his young ward (Michel). Escorted back to the castle, Xandra and Mattias are taken immediately to the dungeon where they await torture and execution (’cause it’s the Middle-ages).
    That evening, Edmond meets with Xandra’s nemesis, an evil professor (Prof Winters), who has been tracking her across time with his henchman, a 19th Century Bandit (“Killer” Miller). The Professor Winters offers the evil Edmond a way to take control of the kingdom by offering him advanced weaponry in exchange for his prisoners. This meeting is overheard by the Michel, who sneaks into the dungeon and frees Xandra and Mattias. Grabbing their future-tech, they race through the castle evading the guards. Finding a room, Xandra opens up a time portal to leave the castle and escapes with Mattias and Michel. The last panel has all three of them standing confused in a 21st century Big City, repeater, sword, and time-wand at the ready. Possibly surrounded by police, I haven’t decided yet.
    At this point I have the page flow pretty much plotted out, and I’m working up thumbnails and prelims. I wanted to go with easily recognizable character archetypes so that the story could get right underway. My other thought was Future-girl and the young Squire meeting up with the Cowboy in the 19th century instead (still ending in a 21st century big city), but I like the “Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court” vibe of this just slightly better.

    Xandra – 20 year old woman from the 25th Century, a research assistant to Professor Winters turned time-traveller. Smart, optimistic, but hates violence and carries no weapons.

    Mattias Smith – Male, mid 30’s. Cowboy/gunfighter from the 19th Century, of African descent, accidental time-travelling companion of Xandra. Tough, capable, but a little too ready to settle disputes with force.

    Michel – 16-year-old 12th Century French noble. Land holdings in England, understudy to Edmond the Black. Brave but inexperienced, he’s been training to become a knight when his guardsmen (led by Edmond) capture Xandra and Mattias.

    Edmond the Black – Male, late 30’s. English feudal lord. Ruthless and capable, he seeks to take possession of Michel’s land holdings for himself.

    Professor Winters (working name)– Male, early 50’s. 25th Century professor of applied temporal physics. Brilliant but quite mad. I haven’t nailed down his exact motivation yet, but Xandra’s trying to stop him. He only shows up in about 2 panels in this story.

    Fred “Killer” Miller – Male, mid-30’s. A 19th century bandit/gunfighter who has become Professor Winters henchman. Shifty and untrustworthy, he also only shows up in about 2 panels with Prof. Winters. <

    Plot breakdown;

    Page 1: Xandra and Mattias race through a forest side-by-side, Mattias is carrying a repeater rifle. Xandra checks a device attached to her ear as she runs which provides her brief info about the era she’s in. They are being pursued by medieval guards and two men on horseback.

    Page 2: Xandra and Mattias come to a cliff. Mattias raises his rifle but Xandra stops him, “They might be someone’s ancestors!” Edmond the Black, one of the horsemen leading the guards (the other is Michel), informs them that they are trespassing and will be escorted back to the castle.

    Page 3: The guards walk Xandra and Mattias back at spearpoint, with the horsemen following. Michel asks Edmond if this is necessary, and Edmond, as caretaker of his lands assures him that he cannot take any chances with security. “They might be spies.”
    Xandra and Mattias walk under the portcullis and wonders “Maybe this won’t be so bad after all.” Last panel– they are behind bars, “Maybe not”.

    Page 4: Castle, Great Hall. Edmond is being addressed by Prof. Winters about how to deal with the boy in exchange for his prisoners. The Professor hands him a repeater rifle, which Edmond receives with a smile. Evil laughing ensues. Listening in at the door however is young Michel.

    Page 5: Castle, dungeon. Mattias and Xandra discuss how they can escape. Mattias wanted to use his superior firepower, but Xandra argues that there must be a better way. A door creaks open, revealing Michel armed with a sword, who unlocks their cell.

    Page 6: No time to argue, they grab their gear and bolt down the hallway—and immediately run into guards. Running the other way, they dart into a side room. Mattias has guns at the ready but Michel waves him in.

    Page 7: Michel bars the door to the room. On the other side of the door Edmond orders that it be broken down. Inside the room Michel drops to his knee and pledges to help Xandra and Mattias escape any way that he can.

    Page 8: “That door’s not going to hold!” shouts Mattias. Xandra points a remote-control type device and opens a time-portal. “This should get us outside of the castle.” She steps through, with the two men moving toward it. Final panel the three of them looking confused, standing in a modern-day (circa 21st century) city with drawn sword, repeater, and Time-wand at the ready. Maybe surrounded by police, I haven’t decided yet.