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  • toddmatthy

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    April 22, 2020 at 6:31 am
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    @rickestrick Hey Rick, I like this outline. Everything seems to be nicely paced and you keep things at one beat per page. The only thing I would change is I’d delete page 3 and move page 4 into its space. Sy can acknowledge things are weird when he’s with his companion then go into the “sappy” scenes. I would use the extra page space to expand the final scene and really drive home the gut punch. Let the final moment with the person he loves simmer.

    As for my story, yes it is a story of clash of generations. Wrestlers from the 80s broke in during a much different business then today.