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Council of the Willing - 2021
@davidshear Just read your outline and enjoyed it. I actually think you can combine the first page with the second page. They both appear to convey the same information.
@phillipspace This is a solid outline. I understand the characters, motivations, plot, and twists. I like how you quickly took using future technology off the table, it really spices up the story. The only thing I would do is clarify the ending. It reads like a cliffhanger. Maybe have a line about “charging up the portal” to put a cap on it.