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  • thesurrealari

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    June 16, 2021 at 12:39 am
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    Chris,

    First off love that you use a different pun than everyone else.

    I think you have a strong foundation. The science fiction elements are really cool.

    I wonder about the choice to ask for an explanation of the time ones. Is there a more subtle way of doing this?

    I also think you have an opportunity to expand the the ending. I would like more description, detail, showing, etc. I know you’re up against the word count, but it’s ok to go over by a little bit. We could always cut words later.