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ModeratorApril 8, 2021 at 11:20 pm
Really tight story. I like the pacing. I think you could get away with not breaking the fighting action depending on how you cut the fight scenes. The captions seem to indicate years of the fight, so they’re not necessarily continuous.
I do think you would benefit from some dialogue that states some of the problems earlier (as others have mentioned), to foreshadow that their eventual reconciliation and to employ some dramatic irony that pays off in the end.