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ModeratorApril 8, 2021 at 10:57 pm
I like this. The story is tight, and I like how you affect the time loop. The only thing that’s tripping me up is the breaking the fourth wall dialogue about comics. I feel like that element could be developed a bit more. Do the others know? Is this a recurring aspect for the character? But overall, it is paced well, and is a cool concept.