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  • jojabarker

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    I like the idea that they’re on a break in a tavern (relating to book-ending the “Time Inn”).

    I’m curious about the transition from Page 1 to 2. Could there almost be an element of, “We were minding our own business, and then THEY attacked!” …?

    Consider more time in space to really emphasize the weight of solitude.

    For the unidentified ship, wonder if there should be an extra plot twist: It’s also human, but our protagonist never sees that truth (the reader does, though!) because they passed out.

    Along these lines, when they reach Earth’s orbit they come-to just long enough to send the message.

    Thank you again, @ASAP for welcoming me aboard!