• mikedoestheart

    April 1, 2021 at 7:15 pm

    Dave, thanks for the feedback on the script, greatly appreciated that you took the time to read. I agree about how page 2 conveys a certain emotion that doesn’t necessarily necessitate the need for a lot of dialogue — I think that’s something we’ll truncate during the lettering process.

    Page 7’s narration text is also a point to scrutinize, perhaps. I think the most important dialogue would just be Gibu’s mention of an important lesson the next day, and that can be conveyed in a few words as well.