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  • redheadeded

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    Ok first off this is unique, I am looking forward to the scripting but catching up on all the posts.

    Some questions, one is the cover a page in the comic / and you have 10 pages not 8.. can you work to edit this to 8 pages?

    Pg 5 who is markly older? Master Gibu or Niknak or the room?

    pg 6 What is the terrifying scene, is he scared cause something is there? or because someone isn’t there? that part was a bit confusing.

    Pg 6 Why does Niknak go for the amulet? except on the cover we have no context that it is important or what it’s purpose is ?

    Pg 7 Is Niknak avoiding people? accidents? is something chasing him? again I was a bit confused here.

    Pg 8 Then the action is done with no conclusion and Niknak is chummy with the wizard? Is there a visual or storytelling element that explains this juxipostion?

    Pg 9 What is the gift? what is the artifact?

    I’d like to give feedback and help you to improve your story, but I don’t know that I know enough yet to help? what are the context clues? will they be expostion? or visual ?

    I am hoping to see more soon and understand the purpose of the wizard’s friendship and the amulet/artifact/gift thingy.

    Thanks,

    D Alley, the Redheadeded