MemberSeptember 17, 2020 at 12:06 am
@jarrodelvin That’s a fun read! As I was reading I realized that the dialogue balloons caused my eyes to focus on details that I had only glanced at previously as well, so it really made me soak in all the hard work you put into the artwork.
The only suggestion I would have for dialogue would be the placement of the last balloon on panel 1 of page 3. My eye jumps to that balloon right after reading the first caption, which I know is out of sequence. I would recommend either moving that balloon down, or possibly into the second panel altogether to avoid confusion (which might be the better fix). That’s the only place where I found the balloon placement problematic, everything else was good.