#8PgChallenge – STEP 1 – Story Ideas

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    • #365
      BuddyScalera
      Keymaster

      Creators,

      Thank you for participating in our first 8-Page Challenge (aka the one where we make it up as we go). Now that we are up and running, it seems like we need a place to share our ideas.

      Here is a place to share your ideas! Here is an example that you can use as a starting point: https://www.comicbookschool.com/8-pgchallenge-story-ideas/

      Post your ideas here in this thread. This is the official place for sharing your story ideas, but you can continue the discussion anywhere you want on these boards. If we need additional breakout boards, please let me or one of the Council members know. We are (as noted above) making this one up as we go.

      As noted in other posts, we are still early in the process. We encourage you to bring fellow creators to join us on the boards.

    • #368

      Lavatasha
      Lavatasha vs Black Ice

      Cold Cash
      At a bank, business goes on as usual. Suddenly, an icy explosion occurs at the entrance causing people to scream. Black Ice, a black man wearing a sleeveless hoodie and baggy jeans, enters. Some security guards approach him and point their guns at him. Black Ice freezes the guards and walks toward the safe. Suddenly, the ice that formed at the entrance from the previous explosion starts melting as Lavatasha, a black teenage girl with lava powers, flies in (by shooting fire from her hands and feet).

      Black Ice shoots a blast of ice at her, but Lavatasha shoots a blast of lava. Their blasts collide and struggle against each other. Black Ice’s blast begins to win the struggle causing Lavatasha to withdraw her blast. He shoots more ice blasts at her, and she dodges them by flying. Flying towards him, she knocks him out with a flame-propelled kick to the face.

      The security guards handcuff Black Ice as Lavatasha unthaws the last of them with her heat powers. She flies away with a smile.

      end.

    • #371
      Andrés Briano
      Participant

      TWILIGHT OF THE GODS PROPHECY

      Characters: The Elf General, the Dwarf General, the Orc General, the Goblin General and the legendary beast Gunungwangi.

      Springboard:
      The generals of two great armies at war, agree a momentary truce in the middle of the battlefield to sit down and negotiate. On one side, an army of dwarves and elves. On the other, one of Orcs and Goblins.

      A common enemy has appeared and has been decimating all races equally. Each race according to their own legends, believe that this gigantic beast is the herald of the end of times. The dwarves speak of their prophecy The Twilight of the Gods: that says:

      Gunungwangi, an immortal Seven-Headed Dragon with sharp spears in its legs, born in hell from Serpent and Flying Beast, big as an ocean, with a shriek as thunder, and an appetite as a volcano that is never satisfied until no more flesh remains.

      So they decide to unite to fight it together. And for that, they will join their skills to create a magical weapon like no other seen before. It will be forged by the Dwarves, using fire provided by the Orcs and iron ore provided by the Goblins, and the Elves would grant it magical powers.

      This magnificent weapon is forged and all soldiers stand together for one last fight. The beast shows up and the weapon proves useless as it is destroyed in a first attack, without even harming the creature. And then, just as the prophecy predicts, before the end of times, the day turns suddenly into night. Which, in reality, is nothing more than an All-Stars sneaker that steps on a cockroach. Because of a matter of scale, this gigantic Gunungwangi was nothing more than a garden variety cockroach. And the tribes that were battling it, were merely millimeters tall.

    • #376
      A. A. Rubin
      Moderator

      Title: A Day In The Life of Mr. Stupendous

      By: A. A. Rubin (Writer) and Arielle Lupkin (Artist)

      Concept Summary: Being a crime-fighting hero isn’t easy, especially in the modern city. You’re out all night fighting crime, working a day job to put food on the table, and trying to maintain your secret identity in a world where smartphones and security cameras are watching your every move. Follow the adventures of Mr. Stupendous, as he navigates the trials and tribulations of being a spandex-clad vigilante. Sure, he’s been blessed with the ability to fly and superhuman strength, but those powers are useless against his boss’ uncanny ability to barge into his cubicle when he is trying to catch a quick nap to make up the hours of sleep missed after a night of fighting crime. Further, his wife is starting to get suspicious about all those late nights, and he can’t exactly be truthful about what he’s really been up to, even to her. Still, things aren’t all bad. Nothing beats the feeling of soaring high above the city, or delivering the knockout blow after a hard-fought battle with a giant green alien. Now, if only this city still had decent phone booths in which he could change into his costume. Mr. Stupendous satirizes the superhero genre, providing readers with the “inside story” of the daily life of the World’s Greatest Hero. Along the way, they will find that despite his amazing abilities, his problems are, in the end, all too human.

      Plot Summary: The story follows MR STUPENDOUS throughout a random, typical day in his life. Starting with a late-night battle and his arrival back home in the early-morning, post-midnight hours, and covering his daily routine from his morning ablutions through a “special” surprise dinner he prepares for his unsuspecting wife using his super-powers.
      The structure is loosely episodic, following his daily routine—including using his wife’s concealer to cover his bruises from the previous night’s battle, having to fly to work in the rain after missing his train, being berated by his boss for being late again, having to use a port-a-potty because there are no more phonebooths in the city, etc—are loosely connected by the timestamp which will occur throughout the comic (similar to the clock in “24”) to give shape to the day, and all highlight the way that he is both slightly outmoded in the modern world, and that his everyday problems are exasperated by his secret life. Each episode is punctuated by the title character sarcastically saying, “Stupendous.”

      Underscoring the comedic story, the driving tension stems from Mr. Stupendous overhearing (using his super-hearing) his wife’s suspicion that he is cheating on her, and his desire to get home on time to make her a nice dinner and allay her concerns.
      Thus, while the individual gags are episodic and could in many cases stand on their own without the frame story, there is a circular narrative underpinning the story, between the wife’s suspicion and Mr. Stupendous’ duty as a costumed hero.
      At the end of the story, when the couple is sitting down to a dinner, complete with wine that Mr. Stupendous has flown to France to procure, Mr. Stupendous asks his wife if she likes the meal, and she responds with a completely unironic “Stupendous.”

    • #383
      philipspace
      Participant

      As I was reading your synopsis, I was thinking it would be better if you had other characters utter the “Stupendous” line for him, ironically or otherwise. Then you have his wife saying it for him at the end, which I think puts a nice cap on it.

    • #384
      philipspace
      Participant

      Trapped in Time (Working title);

      Girl from the 25th century and her 19th century Cowboy companion are being chased by guardsmen in the Middle-ages. Captured by the Evil Knight, they are taken back to his castle and dungeon where they await torture and execution (’cause it’s the Middle-ages).

      Evil Knight is accompanied by a Young Squire, who is the future heir to the lands and castle overseen by Evil Knight, and have a brief horseback conversation on the way back to the castle.

      That evening, Evil Knight meets with future-girl’s nemesis, Evil Professor, who has been tracking her across time with his henchman, a 19th Century Bandit. The Evil Professor offers the Evil Knight a way to take control of the kingdom by offering him advanced weaponry in exchange for his prisoners, but this meeting is overheard by the Young Squire. Before the protagonists can be handed over, the young Squire sneaks into the dungeon and frees them. They reacquire their future-tech, and race through the castle seeking escape, with guards in pursuit. Finding a room, Future-girl opens up a time portal. The last panel has all three of them standing confused in 21st century Big City, repeater, sword, and time-wand at the ready.

      At this point I have the page flow pretty much plotted out, and I’m working up thumbnails and prelims. I wanted to go with easily recognizable character archetypes so that the story could get right underway. My other thought was Future-girl and the young Squire meeting up with the Cowboy in the 19th century instead (still ending in a 21st century big city), but I like the “Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court” vibe of this just slightly better.

    • #385
      jholder12
      Participant

      My Concept
      Camriddeon and the Leighman Lurkers
      Written by: Jack Holder
      Illustrated by: Evan Scale

      Told from the perspective of one of the village boys.
      Camriddeon is a young mage in the court of the king known as the Wild Bear. He is sent to investigate tales of monsters plaguing a small village town called Leighman. He comes into the town, speaking with elders, and playing with the children at the same time.
      There is talk of the Leighman Lurker. A terrifying beast that dwells on the old crossroad just outside of town. For decades it has done harmless pranks, but now, it seems to have developed a taste for blood.
      Late at night, Camriddeon goes out and takes on a terrifying beast. The boy sneaks out, and watches Camriddeon take on the Lurker. A winged, clawed thing, while he does battle with magic and a will to match. He destroys the beast, and is about to bend down towards something, before turning and sending the boy home.
      The townsfolk cheer Camriddeon on the next day. And he talks with the townsfolk, happy for what has happened. But the boy can see a small sadness in Camriddeon, and silently follows him again. Camriddeon goes back to the crossroads, and sees the true Lurker. A misshapen, glowing spirit, ugly and depressed. Camriddeon takes the beast with him, far away from the terrors of man.
      Camriddeon takes a last look at the boy, who sees what the mage is doing. And the mage smiles, and tosses a ball towards the boy, before being gone without a trace.

    • #387
      David Shear
      Participant

      this is the story concept for Lyla and My story!

      TITLE: Crocus Tavern
      Written by Lyla Katz
      Art by: David Shear

      Story Concept:

      Hana is your typical high fantasy Tavern keeper. Working hard every night to provide for her regulars as well as adventurers that have returned from or are going on quests.

      Hana Inherited the Tavern from her father but is feeling unfulfilled with the busy tavern lifestyle and wonders what she is missing.

      After strong-looking Barbarians come to claim the Tavern as their own territory and enslave Hana, a mysterious rogue warrior steps in to save Hana and her Tavern from the ruffians.

      The rogue makes it known that their pronouns are they/them and they’re name is Kei. The Barbarians refuse to respect these pronouns, making the fight more personal for Kei.

      Hana is enamored by the warrior’s strength and cool personality and asks them to be a full-time security guard at her Tavern to which Kei accepts.

      Hana begins her life with Kei and is feeling more fulfilled having someone by her side.

    • #388
      Todd Matthy
      Participant

      Hi everybody,

      Here are my ideas. If you’re interested in drawing any of them, please email me at todd.matthy@gmail.com. Or message me here.

      “Respect”

      Written by Todd Matthy

      Crusher Christian is a veteran professional wrestler who treats the business like it’s real. He is booked to lose a match to Sleazy Steve and take his finisher, the “pelvaplex.” Crusher doesn’t want to take the pelvaplex. Instead he decides to teach Sleazy Steve a lesson, physically. When he and Sleazy Steve set up the pelvaplex, Crusher hits him in the face with an elbow. He tells Sleazy Steve if he wants to win, he’s got to show him he deserves it. Crusher actually wrestles Steve. Steve wins with a low blow and cradle. Crusher says there is hope for him. One week later, Sleazy Steve shows up at Crusher’s wrestling school.

      “Hole in the Sky”
      Written by Todd Matthy

      An artist named Kirby lives on Asteroid X-616. Everyday he draws what he sees and talks to Rose, who lives on a neighboring asteroid. One day a hole appears in the space near them. Rose dares him to find out what’s on the other side. Kirby takes the dare. First, he builds a cosmic fishing rod. It fails. Next, a cosmic harpoon. It fails. Rose laughs. Finally, he builds a cosmic grappling hook and snags a nearby meteor. Kirby and the meteor are pulled into the hole. Rose wonders if she’ll ever see him again.

      “The Target”

      Written by Todd Matthy

      The world has succumbed to an aerial virus. People cannot go outside without masks. Misako Kasura is the top assassin for the Company, a group fighting the virus. Her orders are to kill an agent trying to smuggle a new strain of the virus into America. In exchange, the Company promises to give her daughter the first vaccine with the cure. She completes the mission. Searching the target’s body she finds a pack of seeds with coordinates. Misako memorizes the coordinates before dropping the seeds at Company Headquarters. She goes home and enters the coordinates into G-Earth. The coordinates are an island where the virus is contained. A voice tells her that if she’s seeing this it means their agent was terminated. The voice says the seeds are to a tree that absorbs the virus. Their agent came to America to plant it. The voice finishes that this was the only attempt they’d make to share it. Misako looks at her daughter, who’s breathing through a respirator, and realizes she failed her.

      “Black Terror: Brainwashed”
      Written by Todd Matthy

      Told in the style of a classic Golden Age feature. Jean Starr is driving in a blizzard when her car gets a flat tire. She goes to a nearby house for help, unaware that inside is a mad scientist. The mad scientist brainwashes her. The next day, Bob Benton is at his drug store when he sees the bank across the street is robbed. He sees the culprit is Jean. Bob turns into the Black Terror and follows her to the mad scientist’s house. Inside, the mad scientist orders Jean to trap the Black Terror in his brainwashing machine. Refusing to fight her, Jean shoves the Terror into the device. Seeing the Terror in agony snaps Jean out of her hypnosis. She turns off the device only to find the Terror has been brainwashed. To test his loyalty, the mad scientist orders the Black Terror to tie Jean to a press. He does. Jean cries to the Terror for help, overriding the brain washing. The Black Terror shoves the mad scientist into his device and brainwashes him into surrendering, allowing him to free Jean with no trouble.

    • #389
      Rakeem Nelson
      Participant

      TITLE: Untitled as of now
      Written by Rakeem Nelson
      Story Concept: In this noir-like tale, a young detective is given the case of her elementary school career when a client goes to her with proof of the lunchtime bandit. The young PI is happy to prove to the others that she’s the best at what she does. But with crooked hall monitors, lazy teachers, and ears that seem to be everywhere, this PI might have bitten off more than she could chew.

      Springboard:
      Moments away from solving the case, Susie Sureway wakes up tied to a chair in an abandoned classroom. A voice from the shadows tells her not to scream as everyone else is out at recess.

      Earlier that day Susie was in her janitor closet office organizing her trading cards. Suddenly in walks Vanessa Basial and Henry Ink, two kids from a neighboring class. Susie wants to kick them out but sits them down for a round of juice boxes when they say they have a tip on the lunchtime bandit.

      Armed with her clue, Susie begins to chase after the case. But her new lead lands her in a trap.

      Back in the present, out walks Henry out of the shadows revealing that the clue was fake, and it was all a set up so he could join the hall monitors. Little does Henry know; his teacher was in the room the whole time.

      Returning to her office, Susie finds it broken into with one of her prized trading cards stolen. And the only clue is a bow from Vanessa.

    • #391
      Kyle Rose
      Participant

      Title: “The Beginning Is The End Is The Beginning”
      Characters: Abigail, Officer Rob

      Logline: Abigail steals a time machine in the future to save herself from her own past.

      After arguing with her family on their annual camping trip, Abigail runs off into the woods and stumbles upon a sizeable obelisk-like object. She doesn’t know it, but this is a time machine. In order to get a closer look, Abigail leans into the machine and is accidentally transported approximately 100 years into the future. Upon arrival, she is arrested by Officer Rob for stealing said time machine. She pleads that this isn’t the case, and she has no idea how she got there.

      Abigail manages to breaks the cop’s grip and makes a run for it. A chase ensues. Unfamiliar with her surroundings, Abigail looks for anything that might help her elude the pursuing officer. This scene plays out much like the opening chase scene from “Trainspotting” with Abigail dodging obstacles and avoiding traffic. She puts some distance between her and officer Rob but is spotted by one of the city’s many hi-tech surveillance tactics— a pigeon with a back-mounted camera. The station radios Rob Abigail’s position and he takes a shortcut to catch up. Thinking she is safe, Abigail ducks behind a video kiosk. Rob catches her and draws his baster, asking her to come without a struggle.

      Out of the corner of her eye, Abigail notices another time machine being washed by its owner. She throws her phone at Officer Rob and takes off for the Time Machine. Knocking over its owner, Abigail jumps inside and slams the door shut. The machines A.I. asks her when she wants to go. She tells it 5 minutes before she left. The A.I. scans her, gets a temporal lock, and returns her to her present.

      Abigail runs back to the campsite to warn herself. When she gets there, her parents tell her, ‘that was quick.” Realizing she has just missed herself, she runs back into the woods just in time to see her ‘past self’ fall into the time machine—completing the circle and sealing her fate.

    • #393
      Kris Burgos
      Participant

      Title: No Shelter
      Writer: Kris Burgos
      Artist: ?????

      The world is being slowly overrun by dueling factions of monsters as the first signs of Ragnarok have begun. To combat the opposing sides as the creatures fight for domination of Midgard, the various Viking tribes have united their forces to combat the threat and survive.

      GUNNAR is a warrior in one of the Viking forces and he’s found himself cut off from his group after they’d infiltrated a town stuck in the middle of a days-long monster battle. Their initial priority was to survey the monsters and purge the town of both factions. That mission had gone fubar and the Vikings have now been ordered to evacuate the town, for by the time the sun sets behind the mountains to the west, the town is to be decimated by a flaming arrow bombardment from the distant treeline to the east.

      The story starts here…

      Gunnar is trying to get out of the village before the bombardment begins, using the commotion of the battling monsters and the shadows for cover. He’s been roughed up, already barely surviving an encounter or two and now weaponless, when he finds KAIA, a young girl who has survived the days of violence on her own. Together, they make their way to the docks in an attempt to sail their way to safety, but the fighting has destroyed the boats and monsters battle in the river.

      They backtrack through town to attempt the highly visible run from the village through the vast clearing to the woods to the east, where Viking forces await, stoking their fires and readying to annihilate everything. Before they can attempt the run through the open field, Gunnar and Kaia are forced once more into hiding. In the armorer’s shop. After Gunnar reequips a shield and axe they are discovered by a hellish beast. Gunner stands ready to defend the girl but is quickly disarmed of his axe and is thrown through a wall. The monster has Gunnar on his back with only his shield between them as he screams for the girl to run. Disobeying, Kaia throws her knife to Gunnar who drives it home into the creature’s skull.

      Dragging his axe and a small sword with her, Kaia assists the warrior to his feet. Their scuffle has attracted more monsters and the two are surrounded by creatures. The child steps in front of the warrior holding up her sword and ready to defend him as they both look upward and see the sky lighting up from the east. The flaming arrows are coming.

      Visualization: The style I’m seeing for this is that the monsters aren’t really seen until the final confrontation. Only the destruction (bodies and buildings), shadows of creatures in the backgrounds, and the characters’ reactions to what is seen or heard off-panel are what is on the page. So this can be a series of closeups and environmental work with shadowing and lighting playing a big part until the end.

      • This reply was modified 5 months, 1 week ago by Kris Burgos.
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    • #394
      K S
      Participant

      Series Title: The Unfixed Man
      Characters: Anuton (“Newton” or “Newt”) Holloway

      Story Title: A Prince of Thieves
      Characters: Newt vs. Saint Elaine and her thugs

      Newt, a Traveler, is running low on the power source he uses to both sustain his life and enable him to skirt the laws of physics. Another Traveler, Saint Elaine, is in town, preying on the locals to build her own fuel supply, and Newt intends to take what he needs from her. She is holding a procession through one of the main streets of the city, where Newt plans to create a distraction, slip in, take what he needs from her fuel tanks, and slip out again quickly. Little does Newt know, Saint Elaine and her associates are expected him to attach them, and they’ve set a trap for him.

      Saint Elaine’s line of religious devotees lead a long procession through the streets, her own large carnival float in tow, guarded by her golems. Newt, hiding on the fringes of the gathered crowd, waits for his moment. He launches a flash bang grenade into the middle of her golems, quickly moves to her fuel tanks, and hooks up his extraction device.

      Sensing him nearby, Saint Elaine gives the order, and one of her golems triggers a stunning device attached to the fuel tanks. She miscalculated, however, and the tank ignites, hurling Newt away from the float as it erupts in flames.
      Revived golems chase Newt, who turns down an alleyway and he … disappears. He has teleported using some of the last of his fuel. He discovers that he barely extracted any new fuel from Saint Elaine’s tanks, and consumed precious resources escaping. He’s in a worse position than when he started.

      He’s distracted from his reverie by the sight of a huddled family in a nearby doorway, their child is sick. He rolls his eyes and grumbles, and uses yet more of his precious fuel reserves to heal the child.

      He turns a corner down an alley heading toward his home. While distracted by a gauge showing him that his fuel reading is dangerously low, he is caught in a large sort of spiderweb. Three shadowy figures lurk in the background, whispering his name.

    • #398
      BuddyScalera
      Keymaster

      IDEA #1 – Based on the “Mid-Life Crisis” characters by me and my pal @andyseabert.

      Mid-Life Crisis
      Crisis, Villain

      Springboard: “Our Town Villain”
      Crisis is at a local town function in his secret identity when he realizes that someone in the crowd may be a stone-cold villain who went missing 20 years ago. Now he must decide if he should attempt to apprehend the villain and blow his secret identity. To make matters worse, he’s concerned that a battle could injure innocent people.

      Of course, the hardest part is trying to ID the villain while not appearing suspicious. We play this as serious comedy. That is, Crisis is serious, but it is comical as he tries to use his smartphone to ID the guy.

      In the end, he must make a decision: Attack or let the villain get away. But the real twist is when the villain approaches him to say that he knows that Crisis has been watching him. Crisis is ready to fight when he realizes that the guy wasn’t the villain at all.

      He was either (a) a minor hero who came and went, (b) a guy who was a villain, but not the one that Crisis thought, or (c) something else. Not sure what the final twist is, so I’ll need to work that out. Needs to be funny.

    • #400
      John Ashton Golden
      Participant

      Series Title: “Robby Beyond”
      Story Title: TBD
      Written and Illustrated by John Ashton Golden
      Main Characters: Robby ___, Bi-Do Malfofa, and Skizazz

      Elevator pitch: A fantastic quest for home a la The Wizard of Oz, set enthusiastically against a uniquely blended backdrop of swords and sorcery and science fiction.

      Overall Concept: A precocious loner of a teenager in a small country town named Robby, finds himself whisked away to another world one fateful day. He doesn’t know where he is or how exactly he got there, but it is clear that he is “not in Kansas anymore”. He soon meets and reluctantly takes up travel with the huge, bestial, feline warrior Bi-Do; and the telepathic, scientific, bug-eyed alien Skizazz (the three characters are well fleshed out visually already). Along the way they find themselves in many adventures, predicaments, danger, and personal evolution! I see this as an ongoing series with a huge potential for creative expression and direction, yet easy enough to end when the time is right.

      Backstory: This is a story and a cast of characters I have been kicking around in my head since I was in college at RIT back in the late 90s-early 00s. I pencilled at least 10 pages and inked 7 of those back then for a class. I’ve drawn and thought about them several more times over the years, and would love to create a pitch for either a Kickstarter or to send to a publisher, so I see this 8 page challenge as the perfect environment to finally do that!

      8 Page Story Concept: In this 8 pages we would be introduced to Robby. He is the narrator, and describes himself and his small town life. We cut to realize that Robby is certainly not in this small town life anymore, and is actually in great peril. He is surrounded by strange beings, two of which we quickly understand are on his side. The trio break free of their predicament, have some sort of scrap encounter, and possibly recover something related to their perilous situation. We get the broad strokes of the three main characters’ personalities and capabilities. We may or may not also include a quick interlude back to Robby’s family, who only understand him to be missing for some time now and are extraordinarily worried. Enter a bold investigator named Paul Davides, who suggests to the family he be able to shed new light on what happened to Robby (character inspired by David Paulides, author of the “Missing 411” series). The 8 pages ends on a high note, with our trio safe and sound and moving on to their next adventure, leaving the reader wanting more.

      The goal here is to present the basic tenets of the “Robby Beyond” series, and tantalize the future possibilities, but deliver just enough satisfaction in the events to let it feel like like a nice little sci-fi vignette that stands alone in an anthology setting.

    • #403

      Multi-dimensional Invasion Force meets Immovable Object
      Apex Prime vs the Bad Guys of Marvel & DC Comics (analogues) 😀

      Springboard #1 – “Earth’s Greatest”
      Coincidence collides when a collection of criminals and conquerors, from two SEPARATE universes, decide to invade the Vantage:Inhouse Universe…on the same day. At the same time. Two armies, both alike in infamy, suddenly appear — daring to wreak havoc of untold proportions, first find themselves at odds, until their momentary match up draws the attention of this universe’s greatest hero — Apex Prime.

      Facing off against their combined legion, he outwits, outmatches, and simply knocks out every opponent. The first wave — The Brutes, powerhouses in their own right, but unsophisticated and easily broken down. The second — The Shooters, highly tactical that recognize the best means of fighting may NOT be head on. But their strategy is short-lived against Prime’s power. Thinning the numbers substantially, next we have The Energy Wielders, elemental despots who finally have the means to tip the battle in their favor…if only they understood the foundations of teamwork. And last, The Masterminds, the most dangerous group of all — having weighed and measured the magnitude of Prime’s abilities, one familiar with the likes his scope, turns on the others in a brilliant flash of devastating power. Alone, he stands, the final competitor…but he doesn’t fight. He extends a curtsey, and vacates back to his dimension, leaving the others behind.

    • #406
      RickestRick
      Participant

      STORY TITLE: Save State
      CHARACTERS: Sy Sack, unnamed antagonist.

      STORY IDEA/SPRINGBOARD: Each time Sy Sack wakes-up it is in a new and different situation. Sometimes he’s scaling a mountain, other times he’s an astronaut on a spacewalk, and still more times he’s facing down certain death at the hands of masked soldiers or monsters. Sy never worries about any of this because wherever he finds himself, he feels as if he’s always been on the path that led him there.

      Over the course of the 8 page story Sy will realize that the actions that lead him to these often preposterous situations are not his own. For lack of a better term, he is a character in a video game and each time he wakes up the player is pulling up their most recent saved state of the game that Sy is in.

      The player will never be seen, though the reader will share their perspective. Halfway through the story there will be a glitch and Sy will realize what is going on. He will begin to remember what came before and, more importantly, that the decisions he makes are not his own even if he sometimes thinks that they are.

      The name Sy Sack should evoke “sad sack,” because he can’t seem to win but the glitch occurs in a play-through where Sy has fallen in love. Another character he interacted with had settled down with him. The player didn’t think this was the most entertaining route and, when the game started again, Sy was doing something else with no memory of the relationship having ended, his beloved just wasn’t there anymore.

      Sy realizes that the only way to break the cycle, to not risk going through that hardship again is to make the game undesirable for the player. He begins to jump off of buildings, hurt himself, and constantly risk, or endure, death. Sy is now playing a game of his own with the goal being nonexistence. This seems as if it would be a dour premise but it will be played for laughs. Visual gags of an avatar constantly having the worst turn of their digital career.

      The last page reveals that Sy has accomplished what he wanted and the new lives stop coming as frequently. The player believes that something is wrong and isn’t playing as much but by this point Sy is an auto-pilot and he immediately does whatever the version of crash-and-burn is for the scenario he finds himself in.

      The reveal will come when the player boots up the game from the last time it worked properly, which was when Sy was happily in a relationship with someone. Sy will realize what has happened too late, ruining the game just as he sees his beloved once again. The final panel is Sy’s realization that he almost had another chance at happiness as the player shuts the game off for good.

    • #407
      Jarrod Elvin
      Participant

      Hi everyone, here is my story idea. I think it needs some work, but this is the basic gist because I was falling behind with the challenge. It features my original comic characters I use in my pinup art. I will write the story and create the comic artwork.

      MickMacks’ Meatbucket MegaBabes
      Fidget, Chemi, Dot, Fem Fatale, Vanessa, Daemiana and Scythe vs cosmic horror monsters.

      Springboard: ‘The Virus Dimension’
      The ‘Meatbucket MegaBabes’ are a group of female cartoon pinup models/interdimensional mercaneries/saleswomen. Travelling through different galaxies and dimensions in their giant spaceship, they are collecting information on the latest issue dominating galactic news;
      A virus has taken over the galaxy, planet by planet. It causes it’s sufferers to mutate and meld together into grotesque Lovecraftian entities.
      Interplanetary travel has been outlawed to prevent the spread of this contagion, which its origins are unknown. Everyone is forced, by law, to stay in their homes. The MegaBabes’ AI intelligence suggests that the virus is of interdimensional origin.

      In their interdimensional spaceship, the MegaBabes travel to the dimension, between spaces of reality, where they believe the virus was spawned. Marvelling at the grotesque beauty of the Virus Dimension, Fidget picks a pretty flower that she has never seen before. Just by being in the Virus Dimension, they each begin to show the effects of the virus, and start to mutate.

      Ultimately, they find the source of the virus before it is too late, onto which they unleash heavy firepower. They discover that they can’t vanquish the source of the virus, but they can stop it from leaking out of its own dimension and into ours. They seal the interdimensional gap and escape from the Virus Dimension.

      Once out of the Virus Dimension, the MegaBabes begin to change back into their original forms. The AI intelligence reports that everyone who was affect by the virus is now clear as well.
      In the safety of their spaceship, Fidget emerges with a bulbous head, evidently the effects of a new virus brought on by the flower she picked and brought back. The rest of the MegaBabes shout at her in anger as their own heads swell up.

    • #408
      Leon Skograv
      Participant

      Working title: Streetball
      A boy (early teens) from the country side is spending the summer living with his cousin in the big city. Their only interest in common is basketball, so with a friend they head out to shoot some hoops. What meets them is the intense rough streetball community, a group of older kids challenge them to play for rights to use the hoop, and beats them by dirty play. Tempted to give up and spend the summer inside playing video games, the boys walk by an old half broken hoop in a back alley. They decide to fix it up themselves. With the guidance of an old man yelling at them from his window, they have a place to n develop their skills and truly enjoy the summer.

    • #411
      Doug Wood
      Participant

      Posted in the wrong section. Let me try this again.

      Concept: An inmate at a maximum prison facility for super villains, is blackmailed into robbing a rival gang.

      Story Idea:
      Ultra Max
      Lee Franklin vs Bug-Eyes

      Double Turn
      Lee Franklin’s cellmate is missing. When a goon comes with a message for Lee to meet with the kingpin, it’s clear where the cellmate is gone. Lee goes to the kingpin’s cell. Lee finds out if he wants to see his cellmate again, Lee will go to visitation and steal a drug drop from a rival gang.

      As Lee sits down at visitation, Lee is met by his contact. The contact slides over a packet with pictures of Lee’s kids for further motivation. Turns out the rival gangs drug mule is former superhero, Bug-Eyes. As Bug-Eyes gets up to go into the restroom, Lee follows closely behind. Bug-Eyes ducks into a bathroom stall to do his drug mule business. Lee busts the stall door open hoping for an easy pick. Instead he finds Bug-Eyes in full costume and Bug-Eyes power dampening collar removed.

      A brawl breaks out between the two. This was set up by Bug-Eyes. He was never the gang’s mule, but in actuality the master of his former super villain rivals. Bug-Eyes intends to kill Lee and his cellmate, as they were the ones who killed Bug-Eyes vigilante friend on the outside of prison. Bug-Eyes blasts Lee out of the restroom.In the frantic rushing of loved ones and fellow inmates, Lee finds a smuggled pen. Lee trick-shots the pen into the wings of Bug-Eyes. Causing Bug-Eyes to crash down long enough for guards to subdue him.

    • #416
      Zammap
      Participant

      George Dawkins II: A pretty safe run of the mill super hero story. Aside from the character choice, what will make this different and more interesting then other super hero stories? Aside from her powers, how will you make the reader like Lavatasha, or care? I know there’s already a lot going on for eight pages, but I feel like it’s missing something, character wise, that makes the event more meaningful. It feels like there isn’t anything at stake.

      Andrés Briano: Aw man, that twist really got me. Makes the whole story very enjoyable, especially if it’s done in a super serious pretentious way.. XD cliche things that would normally make a story bad would only make the pun even funnier. This certainly is a story I might be interested in contributing as an artist. Only things I would try to change is perhaps the name/title. It should have something that very very stuttley suggest something off or funny about the story, but reads like a normal fantasy title to those not expecting it. Another thing to think about is if a lot of the information will be conveyed via (dramatic) nnarration boxes or quick events/dialog

      philipspace: Sounds pretty good so far. I guess it’s old school adventure like feel?

      jholder12: Also very good. Something about this doesn’t come off are boring somehow, like it’s still very light hearted all the way through.

    • #417
      Samuel Barber
      Participant

      Springboard #1: Chapter 4 – Where do we go from here?

      After talking Primrose into going to a local bar (in Italy), Alabaster and Primrose sit to have a few drinks and relax to talk about their future and past. While at the bar a young girl comes in to beg for food and work from the owner of the bar. At the same time, a rough group of men comes in after what is presumably illegal and illicit behavior. The leader takes an interest at the young girl talking to the owner.

      When the harassment of the young girl begins to escalate, Primrose notices Alabaster is ready for a fight. Primrose now knows this must be the reason Alabaster wanted to meet up tonight. This must be about another one of his visions. As a 1700-year-old druid that happens to be bat crazy after all this time, he still feels the need to be a protector of the good in the world but there are often underlining reasons for his actions.

      Two against eight doesn’t seem fair based on the skill of Alabaster and Primrose who move in tandem like they have been fighting together for years (when its been centuries). While the gang of men seems tougher than your normal gang, they go down none the less all save the leader, who now has the girl in his clutches.

      The two begin to try and subdue the leader and get the girl out of harm’s way. Alabaster and Primrose notice that the leader is unusually good at fighting and doesn’t seem to be going down. They both realize at the same time that this isn’t a human being, it’s a demon in a human disguise, at this time the demon shakes off the human skin and Primrose and Alabaster see what they are truly up against. As a new level of fighting begins the demon scatters the two and turns his attention to the girl. As the demon gets closer, the girl begins to scream in terror. But as she continues to scream, it becomes powerful and begins disintegrating the demon where he stands, when it hits its peak the inside of the bar is destroyed and only the girl, Primrose, and Alabaster are left standing.

      The girl immediately takes to Primrose and Alabaster. Alabaster tells Primrose the importance of the girl and what he has seen in his visions. Primrose agrees to take the girl and continue with their work to find one of the original demons that had fallen to earth and left here to suffer. Not in heaven and not in hell. Chained to the earth as punishment, always seeking to break free and destroy the humans on earth. The three decide to head back to the monastery Primrose lives with a group of nuns (first indication that Primrose is a nun).

    • #422
      Matthew Timpanelli
      Participant

      Parasomniac by Matthew Timpanelli

      A socially awkward man going through an existential crisis develops a sleeping disorder where he is faced with reoccurring night terrors. Every night he has different versions of his worst fears as a demon attempts to consume his soul. His only respite is a woman who is always present and helping him thwart the monstrous being.

      His issues become so severe his waking life becomes difficult to manage. His lack of proper sleep has him hearing and seeing flashes of his nightmares. As his obsession intensifies, he experiences odd coincidences which lead him to believe that his dreams are coming true. He then meets a woman who resembles the heroine in his visions, however she is unaware of her involvement, if any. There is something undeniable about their strange connection to each-other as she becomes aware of their shared fate.

      [Noir style in the main characters waking life. His dreams vary in style, as each dream he has is themed in a different horror genre (Zombie, Fantasy, Hell, Ghosts, etc…)]

      Excuse my crude sketch of the cover

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    • #432
      Zammap
      Participant

      David Shear: Interested in how this one will play out in more details. As far as I can see now, the main event/action is the fight with the barbarians. Doesn’t seem satisfying enough though. Like the set up is how Hana wishes for more then her tavern life, yet feels better after getting a personal guard so that she can continue working there? Maybe it would make sense if Hana felt uneasy or scared of her new inherited job and feels better after meeting Kei to protect her.

      Todd Matthy: The hole in the sky story doesn’t seem very finished. There’s a lot of action in him trying to invent items and the commentary between him and Rose but having him just disappear seems odd. There is no set up or pay off. And the fact that he’s an artist doesn’t seem to add to the story either. Maybe suggest something deeper in how she pushed him to go in the hole and link it to her reaction of him disappearing.

      I would also avoid the virus story for now. Heh And the wrestling story seems interesting too.

    • #433

      @zammap Thanks for the feedback! I’ve already created the dialogue between the characters which reveals more about them and what’s at stake, but we haven’t had to show that yet.

    • #443
      Zammap
      Participant

      Yeah, feedback at this stage can be hard, lol but I guess it helps iron out the tiny detail we might miss?

    • #445
      Zammap
      Participant

      Gonna repost my story ideas here since it doesn’t seem anyone is using the writers forum anymore. If you have already responded in that forum, I’ve read it. 😉

      1- Untitled
      Writen by me and my husband

        Concept:

      It’s a gritty post apocalyptic story that takes place in like a desert or ruined city. A wizard is trying to use magic and stuff to bring a seed back to life. Some goblins and stuff attack him/his base and they have a battle. He dies but later is seen that the seed/plant has sprouted from his corpse. All action, no dialog.

      2- Untitled super hero story

        Concept:

      A little boy with super hero powers lives in a normal town in a normal world. Unlike most super hero (kids) everyone in the town knows about him and has big hopes for him when he grows up.

        Conflict:

      Boy gets upset when he doesn’t make it to the baseball team. Teachers/coach had decided it was for the best (unfair to other teams, might injure someone). Boy contemplates what’s the point of having super powers and how it’s unfair that he can’t have a normal life.

        Resolution:

      I don’t know XD. So far I think he should meet someone with a disability (either an adult he doesn’t know or a fellow classmate that he didn’t realize had a disability, like asthma, who also can’t play baseball). And realizes that his issues aren’t special to his own and that there are plenty of people who don’t have “normal” lives and they coupe.

      In general it has no action save for a few parts where he is showing off the fact that he has powers, and lots of dialog. Not only does it explore the concept of a super hero in the real real world (no super villains, no monsters, no end of world) but one where a character comes to terms with his gifts and their disadvantages. I would prefer to find someone who can do a traditional realistic comic style artwork, of which I have very little experience doing.

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    • #448
      Joel Barker
      Moderator

      UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE
      (working title)

      “We are more often frightened than hurt, and we suffer more from imagination than from reality.” –Seneca

      A depressed monkey and a homicidal squirrel come-to from a party and learn they’re “roommates” until further notice.

      PITCH:
      Mark and Stephen have yet to meet each other. Even at the same party they won’t cross paths until the morning. When they do, will they accept that they’re stuck with one another?

      OVERVIEW:
      In the shadow of the current pandemic I’ve witnessed Fear’s power over my sanity. Through these two anthropomorphic characters (considering Mark as a Proboscis monkey, and Stephen as a Squirrel) I aim to highlight the importance of sharing our internal struggles. Let’s hope that’s what Mark and Stephen will do, or at least someone save them from each other.

      SUMMARY:
      The morning after a party Mark and Stephen wake up in a strange apartment. After looking at their phones they respectively interpret the latest news: It is advised to stay home, until further notice. Only exchanging a few words will begin their decent into isolation, even from one another. By the end of that first day they’re about to kill each other, or themselves. Fortunate for them the hosts (a Polar bear and a Koala bear) return before the day is out relieving Mark and Stephen of their self-inflicted fear, and in turn sending them home…not without a lawsuit for property damage!

    • #451
      Sathem
      Participant

      Paradiso
      Writer: Emma Farrow
      Artist: Ashley Whitham

      Concept: An alien vampire is unearthed in a ‘Treasure Planet’ meets ‘Atlantis: the Lost Empire’ style expedition on a supposedly uninhabited planet

      Description: The story follows Samander, a salamander-like alien and one of the cooks in the expedition. She doesn’t care about the mission and she isn’t privy to the decisions made, she just follows the coin and does her best for herself.

      Summary: An inter planetary expedition on an uninhabited planet discovers what they believe to be the fountain of youth thanks to a mistranslation. Their mistake will cost them their lives because this is no fountain but Remigius Lafontaine, a vampire which drinks from you to sustain his own eternal youth. Samander is just a grunt, hired to do a job and without a care for the educational or thrill-seeking aspects of the journey. It’s pure luck that Remigius takes a liking to her before he massacres the rest of the caravan.

    • #461
      philipspace
      Participant

      @Samuel Barber: Much of this sounds like it would lend itself well to visual interpretation, but your description seems a bit disjointed, like the who/what/where/and how are being given in the wrong order. Since the reader doesn’t know anything about your characters or their motivation, I feel like I’m getting context after the action. Again, you’ve got some striking visuals that you’re describing, and I’m interested to see how it’s elaborated, this a bit confusing to read at this point. Do you have anyone for the art?

      @ Jarrod Elvin; The words “MickMacks’ Meatbucket MegaBabes” caught my attention immediately, and kept hold of it through the sentence “The ‘Meatbucket MegaBabes’ are a group of female cartoon pinup models/interdimensional mercaneries/saleswomen.” I can’t wait to see this, if only for that.
      If I were at the comic store, I guarantee that I would not be able to walk past this title without picking it up.

    • #480
      A. A. Rubin
      Moderator

      @georgedawkinsII: There are a lot of strong opposites in your idea, hot vs cold, male/female, etc. I wonder how you can make those symbolic beyond the action of the story. The action/fight scenes can carry the reader’s attention through, but I think there is potential for more symbolic meaning to be developed through the dialogue.


      @buddyscalera
      : A lot of comedic potential. I love the serious comedy style. what if, unbeknowst to the hero, the “villan” had been trying to identify him (the hero) in the same way. In the final “aha” moment, they realize they have both been mistaken about the other’s identity?


      @philipspace
      : The idea of having others say “stupendous” is interesting, I worry, though, about the space I have to work with. In a story this short, I don’t want to overcrowd the cast with too many people.

    • #483
      philipspace
      Participant

      @thesurrealari I was thinking more like the “extras”, eg. a nameless crossing gaurd, a random construction worker (upon discovering a wrecked porta-potty), etc. People on the street, basically. It’s a throwaway idea if it doesn’t fit though.
      I do look forward to seeing this fleshed out a bit. 8 pages with between 4 and 6 panels per page, with pages 1 and 8 bookending the setting and finale, with your final scene change probably on the latter half of page 7 as Mr. Stupendous is wrapping up his day. You could do your “24” pacing if you did all single-panel scenes pages 2-7, it just seems to me that the pace would be extremely tight and not leave much room for panel-to-panel continuity.

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    • #518
      vegapunkslab
      Participant

      Little late to the party. Is there a deadline for each step?

    • #519
      BuddyScalera
      Keymaster

      Yes, @vegapunkslab. I’ll be sending you an invite to the calendar in a few minutes.

    • #550
      Redheadeded
      Moderator

      OK, I am a bit late due to Migraine issues but here is my Story:
      My entire story is the interplay between the women and how they navigate what I perceive to be the top 6 female archtypes.

      Virgin / Mother / Matron / Lover / Bitch (or Ex-Lover) / Omega (Woman not associated with men).

      Basically I want to see how a group of women will navigate the Zombie apolcolipse without men (for the most part).. It will rely heavly on their interactions and how they deal with what’s in front of them as a group of cooporative (or non-cooraproative) women. The most important thing to me is their interactions and reactions to the situcation that’s my story focus. I realize also that these women are playing architypes, they may or may not actually be mother’s, lover’s, etc. but that’s the role they play in the group. And they will not all be straight. Although I am straight myself, so I am nervous to protray a different sexualty than mine. I think I have a good handle on the characters so we’ll see how I do, hopefully I’m not downright insulting.

      So here is my plot:
      “We open on a small suburban house in Dallas. Six women in various states of a hangover wake up after a barchelorett party and each comes to realize there is a zombie at the front door. The women deal with the first zombie which only to annouces their presences to the neighborhood. They rally to escape the house as the hoard begins to descend and breakin. And we see that maybe this group is not as friendly as they could be. Will they survive the zombie onslot? Will the escape the descending hoard? Will that annoying narrator ever shut-up? .. oh.. um I guess we’ll find out.”

      After re-reading that post it sounds kinda high concept; but it’s really just a women’s only ‘escape the zombies’ story. So I hope it will be a fun read. My current Story is 28 pages long, so we’ll see how I can trim it to keep it moving, wish me luck!

      Thanks,
      Erin (AKA the Redheadeded)
      Also posted in Writers forum: http://create.comicbookschool.com/forums/topic/writers-forum/page/2/

    • #564
      RickestRick
      Participant

      @andresbriano I laughed out loud at your story. I really enjoyed it. Are you going to have everything before the reveal be super-serious? Something akin to old Conan comics or LOTR before the last page reveal of a farce? I’m interested to know how you would hide the surprise that the Big Beast is a roach and not some mythical creature. What would the characters actually be doing for the first 7 pages, speaking the beast up, one-upping each other with how insanely badass their myths have made it out to seem? Can’t wait to read it, great job.


      @toddmatthy
      I know you’re heart is set on the wrestling one but I have to be honest I’m most taken by the Jack/Roz love story. What if Jack realizes that Roz’ asteroid is headed toward a black hole and that while she thinks his attempts are to get to her to impress her he is actually trying to swerve her away from the impending doom? Curious as well why you chose Black Terror as a licensed character to work on. I love that property and think it’s a great choice but it’s not one I see often as a favorite of others.

    • #566
      RickestRick
      Participant

      @redheadeded You had me with “Will that annoying narrator ever shut-up?” I love that type of interaction with the reader. You seem hesitant to go meta, as you put it, but I think that could be a strength. Taking these six archetypes and placing them specifically within this setting should make for some great character work especially if they’re all exaggerated to some degree. Have you see Cabin in the Woods?

    • #572
      Andrés Briano
      Participant

      Thanks for the encouragement, @rickestrick. Much appreciated.

      The first 7 pages will be dead serious. The descriptions of the beast will be done by quoting excerpts of the prophecy, like: “Gunungwangi the immortal seven-headed Dragon. Born in hell from Serpent and Flying Beast, big like an ocean, has a shriek like thunder, and an appetite like a volcano, never satisfied.” Which is cool, because prophecies lack any accurate details. They need to be interpreted more than they need to be read. So technically, it is not cheating the audience.

      Here’s the plot, for further info.

      #8PgChallenge – STEP 2 – Feedback + Plotting

      Cheers! 😀

    • #578
      RickestRick
      Participant

      @andresbriano I think that’s such a great, and inventive, way to present the threat. Can’t wait to read it.


      @krisburgos
      Love the title. Song reference? Your story is so bleak and I love that about it. I kept rereading to see if I missed something, if they could get out, but no they knew about the bombardment and the kid will end as one of them. Love the Jaws effect of allowing the reader to build the threat of the monsters before they are shown.


      @teamwood
      Such a great reveal. Have you read Supercrooks by Mark Millar and Leinil Francis Yu? The feel of this reminded me a little of that. I do have a question, if Bug-Eyes is a public superhero who is actually in charge of the criminal element, why risk his public persona to go into the prison to kill Lee, why not have one of the others who work for him do it? I really enjoy the brawl so please let me know if I missed anything.


      @psy-sci
      “Parasomniac” is a perfect name. Definitely one that would get me to flip through it if I saw it on the rack or preview it online. Has a Brazil feel but that is not a bad thing. Will the reader be shown why the man and the woman are connected? Why is it her, in particular, who must help him slay the threat and, presumably, put his world back in order?

    • #582
      Matthew Timpanelli
      Participant

      @rickestrick Save State is cool, I really love how fun this could be visually and it has the opportunity to bring back a lot of nostalgia. Definitely do some research into what are the most notoriously hard games or maneuvers in games. I was coincidentally watching top ten videos last night and Battletoads was the number 1 hardest game.

    • #653
      Redheadeded
      Moderator

      Geez you guys are blowing me out of the water.. these are going to be excellent.

      @RickesRick I haven’t seen a lot of horror or Zombie movies I mostly avoid them, other than maybe Zombieland, Shaun of the Dead and the like I’m not a big zombie person. That’s kinda where this story came from, one of my groups of friends having a BBQ and all the guys talking about their “zombie plan” and none of the girls having a clue what that meant. So I am trying to get the first piece out of my head and solidified before diving into much reference materical as I am very easily influnced by other things I see.

      I feel like I will have more feedback in an artistic stage, so keep up the good work everyone!

      Erin (AKA the Redheadeded)

    • #793
      Zach
      Participant

      I am late! I only found out about this last week but I’m hoping catching up is ok! I’ll be writing and drawing this comic, and collaborating with the amazing Maja (not sure what her forum name is, sorry Maja!).

      It’s going to be a high fantasy concept I’ve been playing around with this character, a Cleric for the God of Luck, named Bron. He has no holy powers to speak of, except chance; it’s a world dominated by prophesy and fate, his presence introduces an unknown quantity in events. He represents fate disrupted, and so his adventures are following opportunity and chance where they lead.

      He’s compelled to follow where chance leads him (in the form of a pendant on his neck that works like a Magic 8 Ball, Yes, No, Go/Stay type answers only). It opens on a ship’s voyage to a forbidden monastery he was compelled to go to because of an unfortunate roll of his pendant. He was asked by a mad baron, compelled to return to the monastery to repay his debts to the Dread Clergy there. On page 5 he reveals his gambit; that the presence of Bron alters the foregone conclusions of the altercation between the Mad Baron and the Dread Clergy, where Bron, instead of the Baron, is submitted as The Sacrifice to fulfill his debt. The foregone outcome of the Mad Baron dying as sacrifice is usurped by chance, and the Baron, the Monks, and the entire Monastery is burned down instead.

    • #905
      Kris Burgos
      Participant

      So, I replied to @mikedoestheart’s call for a writer, and will be doing a second story with him as the artist. For this one we’ll be using characters of mine from my book Teddies. Here’s the concept…

      This is NOT a kids book. This is a Horrorbook.

      A young boy named Eric is resting peacefully in his bed at night, reading a book in solitude when a monster creeps out from under his bed and attacks. Eric’s stuffed teddy bear, Alexander, springs to life and seemingly slays the beast, much to the astonishment of Eric, but then gets snatched up and dragged under the bed. Mikey, another of Eric’s stuffed bears, is forced against his will by the town’s stuffed teddy bear community to go into the world under the boy’s bed and rescue Alexander. Unknown to Mikey, when he steps through the threshold in the world of Nightmare, he’s followed by a curious boy.

      This is where our story begins.

      On the edge of a small town one would imagine was built by Tim Burton, Mikey picks some disgusting looking berries from a bush and after inspecting them, he hands the berries to Eric. The boy asks why he has to eat them, and Mikey barks at him, that he shouldn’t have followed him and to eat what he can get. They’ve been together for a few hours and nothing but frustration at the boy and his assigned quest are coming out of Mikey.

      Unknown to the duo, they are being watched by another stuffed teddy from the shadows. Chucklez is a teddy who has been stranded in Nightmare for many years… since the 60’s. He was a bear lost to a child in the war in Vietnam and found his way to Nightmare after seeing the horrors of war. Festering in the mysterious dark energy that bleeds throughout the land bringing fears to life, Chucklez has had years marinating in PTSD from his memories of the war and has become a psychotic menace to everything in Nightmare.

      When Mikey storms off, stranding Eric, Chucklez steps in and offers the boy some help. Trying to remain calm, Mikey returns in time to see Chucklez manipulating the boy to follow him, but when he calls out to stop Eric from following the shady character, before the boy can react, Chucklez drags him off.

      As Mikey follows, he loses them in a horrific amusement park. Searching the park that no parent in their right mind would allow their children to visit, Mikey hears Eric’s screams as the boy is tied to a bullseye board, next to a ride similar to spinning teacups. With the ride in motion, Chucklez sits blindfolded in a spinning teacup, throwing knives at a helpless and immobile Eric. Grabbing a mallet from a strength test, Mikey fights through a gauntlet of throwing knives, acid shooting guns and shark-toothed clowns to interrupt the ride by disabling the power and knocking Chucklez out in the process. Eric apologizes for following Mikey and Mikey promises to protect him while they are in Nightmare, one step closer to becoming the full-blown guardian all Teddies are supposed to be of their owners.

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