Reply To: #8PgChallenge – STEP 2 – Feedback + Plotting

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K S
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Series Title: The Unfixed Man
Characters: Anuton (“Newton” or “Newt”) Holloway ; Saint Elaine
Story Title: A Prince of Thieves
Setting: A generic, run-down city

Page 1:
• Large splash page
• Newt lurking with crowd, watching large religious procession coming by

Page 2:
• Newt observes the starving people reaching out for Saint Elaine’s procession. He is disgusted at Elaine and her people for taking advantage of the situation.
• Newt sets off his charge and sneaks in close to the fuel tanks

Page 3:
• Newt, working on draining the tanks, discovers Elaine’s trap
• Elaine hesitates a moment, just enough time for Newt to back up from the tanks
• Newt is blown back by the device once she sets it off

Page 4:
• Chase/fight between Newt and golems
Page 5:
• Newt slips free, down an alley, followed by a flash of light
• Golems turn down the alley, it’s a dead end and is empty.
Page 6:
• Clear of the golems, newt is heading home
• He performs an act of charity. Newt finds a family with an ill child huddling over a heating grate as he makes his way home. Grumbling, he uses some of his fuel to heal the child.

Page 7:
• Checking his fuel gauge, Newt realizes he is worse off than before he attempted the theft.
• Turning a corner into an alley that leads to the abandoned warehouse where he lives, he is caught fast by something; surprised/shocked.

Page 8:
• Large splash page
• Caught in a web, figures lurking in the background call his name.

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