Reply To: #8PgChallenge – STEP 2 – Feedback + Plotting

#481
Kris Burgos
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Setting: ~950AD; Viking Town in the Forest, on a River
Time of day: About 30 minutes before SUNSET
Characters/Growth:
Gunnar – A Viking Warrior (Cares about self survival → Kaia’s survival & Accepts fate)
Kaia – 8 yr old Viking girl (Cares for herself → Cares for Gunnar)

Page 1
– The SUN lingers above a mountaintop in the distance
– GUNNAR hides in the shadows between a cart and some crates; he’s in rough shape;
– He thinks about having to get out of the town before his people destroy it
– Gunnar sees a small HAND in the distance, reach out from the shadows of a house and grab an apple in the dirt
– He gets up to investigate

Page 2
– Gunnar sneaks through the shadows, hiding from the monsters off-panel
– Gunnar enters the house

Page 3 – Gunnar meets KAIA, eating the apple & defending herself with a KNIFE
– Gunnar & Kaia discuss her survival & the town’s fate
– Gunnar plans their escape: a suicide run through the open meadow between the town and the forest
– The sun is CLOSER to setting behind the mountain

Page 4
– Gunnar decides to increase their chances by stopping at the Armorer’s shop
– They leave the safety of the house
– Gunnar and Kaia slink through the shadows

Page 5
– More hiding through the shadows, avoiding monsters, Gunnar always stands protective of Kaia as she points the way
– A MONSTER notices them enter the Armorer’s shop
– The sun has REACHED the mountain and is half set behind it

Page 6
– Gunnar arms himself with a new SHIELD and AXE
– A monster creeps into the house
– Gunnar decapitates the monster; Kaia warns Gunnar of a second monster behind him
– Second monster dives onto Gunnar smashing them both through the wall of the house outside

Page 7
– Gunnar fights monster on his back, shield between them, screaming for Kaia to run
– The shield cracks as Gunnar shows despair, Kaia’s knife lands in the ground next to him
– Gunnar grabs the knife and slams it into the side of the monsters head
– Kaia helps Gunnar upright with new weapons at their feet
– The sun is GONE behind the mountain and DUSK has arrived

Page 8
– Kaia stands ready, sword in hand, to defend Gunnar
– Creatures come out of the shadows surrounding them
– Gunnar rests his hand on her shoulder and points upward, beyond the creatures
– Flaming arrows streak through the air, mixing with the stars in the sky, coming down on them

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